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Virgil
25-07-2006, 02:09 AM
The red sun rose slowly, driving back the night’s chill in its steady and foreboding ascent. Thin gray shadows stretched far across the barren land like starved ghosts. Giant crags of bleached boulders rose from the earth, dry and cracked in web-like patterns that spanned the endless wasteland. Far below the cloudless sky, a figure stirred awake.

Between two twisted spires of stone, a man lay flat on his back. Whip-like cords bound his wrists and ankles, stretched out from his prone position and wrapped tightly around the bases of the spires. Consciousness returned, and the man let out a piteous, muffled groan. A blood-stained piece of cloth filled his mouth, and another length of fabric holding it tightly in place. He squeezed shut his sleep starved eyes, suppressing as best he could a very strong impulse to vomit. Trying to roll over, he felt the cords around him flex slightly, then snapped back into position. Unable to move even a few inches, he despairingly stared ahead, his mind racing. His fingers grappled feebly over the parched soil, praying some sort of fragment of stone or shale, or anything that could be of any use to him. When the sun hit its zenith, there would be no hope for him. He tried very hard not to think about what he would have to do even if he managed to free himself. Already the blood that pumped hotly through his veins felt very much like acid; his muscles throbbed and ached. A small voice in his mind muttered that a lone trek across the barrens was death, even if he knew where he was going. He had to get free. He had to find a way.

The silence of the barrens mocked him, a slow, lazy hum of the lightest breeze. As he struggled, he could feel the earth around him grow warmer. He breathed in hot, fitful, bursts out of his nose, desperately doing his best not to panic. His throat and eyes began to feel tight and dry; his entire body seemed to scream in terror and agony.

Then he thought he heard a click. He tensed, his bloodshot eyes scanning the desolate horizon. To his side, from under the shade of a boulder, a small, head-sized creature scuttled out from the darkness. It had six thin legs, covered in a burnt orange carapace. Moving in a strange, lopsided gait, the creature tentatively approached him. The man tried very hard not to breathe: from under the hard, protective outer shell, he saw small, glistening teeth.

Click.

Suddenly, the creature dashed forward. The man thrashed against his bindings, but they held. In a moment, it was upon him. A sharp pain lanced through him as it bit his neck, its thin fangs sinking quickly into his flesh. He tried to shake, to move, to get it off, but the ropes were bound too tightly, and he could only squirm as he felt its little legs dancing on his face and shoulders. The pain was too much, his binds too tight, his consciousness slipping away, and for a fleeting moment, he thought about death, when the pressure disappeared. He heard the clicking come to a climax, before ending with a sound like a large, wet nutshell being cracked. Hot air burned through his nostrils as his lungs heaved in and out. He thought he heard a rustling close by, when a shape leaned over him, silhouetted against the mid-morning sun.

The bound man stared up, knowing something had happened, but was unable to make sense of it. The shape leaned over him without a word, and shifted into the light.

It was a girl. But her hair was different, fine feathers growing from her scalp. Her skin was a dark yellow, her arms sprouting thick feathery wings of forest green, mottled with rusty flecks of red. Her full lips were a shade of purple, and her slightly slanted eyes flicked over his body.

“I know you have done something wrong.” When she spoke, her voice was soft, trembling. “I have seen your people leave their own out here to die to the heat or the scrabs. But only those who they say have deserved it.” Here she paused, a slight grin curling her lips, and surveyed him once more. “What did you do?”

He felt something hard slide neatly between the wrap and his cheek, and sever his gag in one sharp tug. Coughing raggedly, he spit a bit a blood onto the hot dirt.

“What did you do?” she repeated.

The man looked at her helplessly for a moment, and then opened his mouth as wide as he could. Her eyes narrowed for a moment, and then she understood.

“I can help you, but you must help me.” She said no more. There was no need. She was his only hope.








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This has been part one in a series of I'm not sure yet. Comments of course are appreciated, criticisms as well. Thanks.

Mr_Teatime
28-07-2006, 01:52 AM
Wow...good stuff. I've always envied people who can put that much vivid description into a scene. It's a feat I've never been able to accomplish.

I'm just confused as to the race of the current main character...is he a human? If so, what's he doing in The Barrens? Though I imagine that will probably be explained later on. Good stuffs so far.

Virgil
28-07-2006, 04:28 AM
Thanks Mr_Teatime! That's great to hear. Well, this bit answers one of your questions. Enjoy.

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“Hold him down!”

Rough hands grappled all over, his feet and wrists were bound, the coarse ropes biting through his skin. Angry, scared eyes flashed in the dark. He tried to pull away, but there were too many. Far too many. He kicked out madly, but his limbs wouldn’t respond. He couldn’t speak. A powerful drug was coursing through his veins and clouding his thoughts. He had to get free, he had to get out, but he was overpowered. The men around him turned their attention away towards the opened door. A thin man with gaunt features stepped into the light, and addressed them all.

“You are to take him to the sand-teeth, where he will be purified by earth and sky. This is our judgement.” His voice dripped with contempt. Yet there was a tremble there. Fear? “Because of the particular danger that this man poses, we will take an additional precaution before carrying out the sentence.”

A moment of terror passed as he saw the man pass a short, curved blade to a man with cold eyes.

“Take his tongue.”

A foul-tasting metal device was forced into his mouth, prying apart his jaws and spreading his lips wide. He tried to scream, but could only gargle as the man with the knife leaned closer. Closer.


The man choked greedily on the waterskin his benefactor had provided, allowing a liberal amount to slop down his chin and down his chest, only to find it snatched away a moment later.

“That’s enough, human,” she said, a hint of disgust tinging her voice. He met her eyes, but she merely stared back at him blankly.

For a moment neither said a word. Then, coughing and sputtering, the man slowly got to his feet and began to test his muscles, stiff from inactivity. He glanced back at the girl, trying very hard not to look nervous. She was a harpy, a wild and violent race of avians. One too many stories had reached his ears of their deeds to allow him any bit comfort.

It was then he realized he was completely unclothed.

His eyes swept the ground, but could find nothing but the
shredded remains of the ropes that had only minutes earlier threatened his end. Chancing another look back at the feathered harpy, he decided that if she didn’t care, then neither would he.

Groaning with exasperation, he rigidly picked them up into his arms and sat down. His dirt-crusted fingers guided the cords into complex knots; his brow furrowed in concentration as he struggled to remember exactly how they went. This particular trick required precision, and it had been some years since he had last used it.

“What do you think you’re doing, human?” she growled impatiently.

Dropping his work, he gestured to her, beckoning her to come closer. She stared at him for a moment longer, and then warily edged her way closer.

It was here that he noticed something wrong as she crawled forward using only her hind legs and right wing. Her left was tucked to her side; quite a few feathers appeared to be missing, and it was bent at a strange angle. At this, he couldn’t help but allow himself to feel slightly relieved. She wasn’t in great shape either.

When she came to his side, he scratched a few patterns into the dirt, pointed to them, and then back to himself. Her emerald green eyes scanned the scrawl and turned back towards him.

“Erran,” she said, almost sounding bored. He pointed at her, waiting. She sighed dramatically before answering.

“Kaera.”

Erran made a slight bow and picked up the knots once again and returned to his craft.

“Wonderful. Now that we’re acquainted...” At this she threw a look over her shoulder. “We have some ground to cover.” Pausing for a moment, she looked at her injured wing, and then back to Erran. “From the looks of things, it’ll be slow going.”

Erran stopped twisting the ropes for a moment, looked at them with narrowed eyes, and gave them a firm tug. It held. He grimaced and got to his feet, slinging the strange net of knots over his back. Kaera strapped the waterskin around her side and breathed deeply.

“Follow me.”

Mr_Teatime
10-08-2006, 09:37 PM
Wow. Clever stuff. A harpy as a main character, instead of one of the conventional races. I really wanna find out what the human did to piss someone off so badly as to cut out his tongue and leave him to the scorpions :shocked:

Inferior
14-08-2006, 12:40 AM
Harpy and Human characters... Nice concept... Can't wait to find out more about why he lost his tongue and why her wing is busted...

Tor varr
19-08-2006, 01:28 AM
I really enjoyed what little of the tale was there, and am looking forwards to more.

I really can't give any criticisms. The writing is flawless, the plot engaging, and the entire setting done perfectly.

Bravo.

Niderin
07-09-2006, 04:25 AM
So have you droped this story or what?