Dwell Of Moonwell

[Nitesky]

Once, there was a Night Elf by the name of Ella. Ella was warrior who believed that she had strength of the bear. Ella took a blade of darkness and slayed a dragon.

Years later Ella was famous to the world of Teldrassil. Darnassus senator congratulated her. Ella said thank you and fell to the ground. Teldrassil was shocked that a brave warrior like Ella was slayed. The Senator then fell to the ground.

Suddenly there was a loud booming sound on the other side of the enormous ruffled tree. The vice-senator went to look but only heard sounds. When vice-senator, Lazuer, walked back out he was held against the Night Elven will. Lazuer fell to his knees and was set free. Lazuer then told the Darnassian spies to go find out what happened.

Then and there was chat about Ella. Then there was chat about Nycon. Nycon was a silent Night Elf rogue who was the first to redempt himself at Ragnoras' at Molten Core. Nycon entered the conversation and replied with "yes."

Nycon led an expidition to the trace of the attack. "Enemy ship in sight, sir." said a Darnassian peon. Nycon jumped off the boat and plunged into the dark water. Nycon got to land in six minutes. He stood silently as the boat approached the wharf. Nycon pulled out his blades and crept towards the smoke. Nycon then said silently for 3 Rogues to help him attack the camp. Nycon entered the enemy camp then stopped. The other rogues stopped too. "This isn't just any enemy camp, this is our rival's camp."

TBC...

[deathfromabove]

I am confused. Is this a plot summary of something you are going to write, or the whole story. If it is the latter then you really need to do a lot of work on this.

I'll assume this is just a summary though

[Nitesky]

Author's Note: Lazuer is pronounced, (La-zhure)

Nycon crept further until he found a scroll leading to the Darnassian territory. "This map was drawn perfectly, there is no possible way that a blood elf could draw this." said Nycon slyly. Nycon looked around angrily for another source of peace. "Ughh, this ...this is an outrage, why would a Night Elf do something like this?" asked Nycon as he walked out of the room.

Nycon looked at tree markings, then turned to the three men that followed him into the encampment."We have a problem in our hands." said Nycon as he began to break a tear. "The whole Night Elf population is in our hands." Nycon stood straigt as Lazuer entered the sight. Lazuer found Night Elven armor. "Yep, this means another war." said Lazuer.

Lazuer walked out and seemed that he was putting on armor. Nycon walked out of the tent the drew to and looked at Lazuer. "Brother, this is a war you cannot wager!" Nycon yelled towards Lazuer. Lazuer looked down and put down his gear. "I am sorry I cannot risk another sibling, Ella is horrible as it is." said Nycon.

Lazuer's skin began to glow. The two brothers looked up and saw that that the moon was shimmering. "Hehe, brother I know I am not as experience as you are in combat, but this is a war that we cannot win without me." said Lazuer as he giggled. Nycon stepped out of the trees shadow, then his skin began to glow as well.

"Brother, I am the one who was hurt the most in this war, I will not be hurt more." said Nycon. "You won't, I promise you."

TBC

[Nitesky]

Nycon left Lazuer's sight and walked towards the allies. When Nycon entered there was someone on the floor, it was a human. Nycon rushed to the problem. "Whats going on?" asked Nycon. The human stood up and pointed towards the three rogues. "Those ...those things attacked me when I entered my tent." said the Human.

Nycon laughed and told the others to step down. Nycon walked towards the human, shook his hand and introduced himself. "What is that?" asked Nycon as he pointed towards the Human's neck. "Nothing." said the human shakingly. Nycon took the Human by the neck and stared at him. "Aha! as I suspected, the mark of the Horde." The human stood up and said, "Not again, listen, I am Raston." "I was marked by the Horde by torture years ago, I am part of the Stormwind Militia." said Raston.

Nycon asked Raston about plans. "Yeah I saw a couple bright elven people walking in the Eversong Woods a couple days ago." said Raston. Nycon stood up and walked towards the wharf. "What exactly are you planning to do?" asked Raston. "You'll see." said Nycon

As the ship sailed Raston spit a couple times watching blood spill from his mouth. Raston walked towards the senator's room on the ship. Nycon was talking to Lazuer. "That human, he is famous he is a human legend." said Nycon. "I am sure that he will be able to help us, after all he is wearing Militia Tabard." said Lazuer.

[Four Days Later]

Nycon walked out stretching his arm. "Finally, a good ol' fassion but kicking time." he said as he yawned. Nycon woke the four others up preparing him self for a Eversong Raid.

TBC

[Nitesky]

Nycon stepped on the land. Seconds later Thalassian soldiers were rushing towards him. As Nycon disappeared before their very eyes the others were surprising from behind.

Walking away from the incident Nycon put his blood drawn blade away and walked towards a sparkling light that seem to rise farther up during every hour. Nycon encountered another soldier. This soldier didn't seem to mind that Nycon was here. Nycon was asked a couple questions.

[Eight Days Later]

Nycon woke up in a cold dark cell with three others. Nycon jumped. "Where is rusty ...Raston!?" asked Nycon. "He was taken to some guy named Lord Sunstrider." said one of the three Night Elfs. Nycon tried yanking away from the chains. Nycon then remembered something that Ella taught him. Suddenly Nycon fell through the ground and came out a few feet farther. "Thank you Ella."

Nycon walked towards what he hoped was the door. Suddenly there was a click. Nycon opened the door, and closed his eyes as glimmering light came into the room. The others were chained against the wall so they couldn't use Nycon's ground trick. "You guys ...alright...AHH." screamed Nycon in searing pain. Nycon looked up only seeing two alive. "He was killed in the cuffing process." said one Nightelf.

Nycon began to gather anger. "Where are my weapons?" Nycon asked his friends. "In the armory two miles south from here." Nycon sighed then walked away. Nycon limped out of the door, held his wrist, then fell to the ground.

TBC

[Nitesky]

Raston walked toward the Stronghold while he was chained up to two other guards on each side of him. Many times Raston tried to escape but failed. "You two are failures." The Blood Elf looked at Raston puzzled.

Raston now was at the stronghold in front of Lord Sunstrider. "Uh ...hi." said Raston to Lord Sunstrider. "Hello." said Sunstrider. Raston now was the puzzled one. "How do you speak common?" asked Raston. "I have my sources." said Sunstrider.

"So you say that your with those other five, huh?" asked Sunstrider.
"Yeah I am proud to be with them, scum." said Raston.
Sunstrider stood up taking a dagger to Raston's neck. "I am royalty, not scum you understand!" yelled Sunstrider. Raston giggled. "Sunstrider you are a filthy bag, you are a sorry piece of..." Raston was interuppted as the dagger was pushed closer to his throat. "You are no longer able to speak." said Sunstrider. "Hey, I am human, not scum, you understand?"

Sunstrider lost his patience and plunged the dagger into Raston's leg. "I hope that will teach you a lesson." Raston fell to the ground, picked up a brick, and chucked it at Sunstriders head. Sunstrider fell down in unconciousness. "Hehe, hope that will teach you a lesson." Raston stood up holding his hamstring he turned to his left and found the armory.

TBC

[Nitesky]

Raston finally got to the armory. "Nycon's gear." Raston picked up the gear and set it to the side. "My gear." he picked up his gear and put it on. Raston walked out of the room and ran into Nycon. "My friends are ...chained to the walls at the Academy of Dark Arts around five miles somewhere around here." said Nycon. "Could you free 'em?"

Raston nodded and walked off. Nycon layed on the table staring at his gear. "Raston, you just made my day." One hour later Raston reached his destination and set the others free. Meanwhile Nycon was searching for the Throne. When he gave up looking for it he walked out of the room and heard a noise. "Night elf!" said Sunstrider. "Hey! it's Overlord's Son!" said Nycon. "I remember you." "You are the kid I always teased many years back when you were with the alliance." chuckled Nycon. Nycon picked up his blade and sprung an attack against Sunstrider. Minutes later Sunstrider was dead.

Nycon turned around and found an arrow in his chestplate. Nycon pulled it out and looked up. "Lazuer, what are you doing?" asked Nycon. Lazuer walked up the rest of the stare case taking the crown off of the dead king. "I'm earning my chance to be better then you!" yelled Lazuer. "Lazuer this is serious, get on the boat." demanded Nycon. Lazuer ignored the comment and slowly sat on the throne. "Ahh, yes! I feel the power circling through the veins of this little chair." said Lazuer. Suddenly a major zap occured in the chair. Lazuer concentrated on hopping up but failed. Nycon has lost his sibling to control over power. "Most unamuzing." said Nycon finishing the chapter of Lazuers dark pact.


Another Story is Yet To Be Released: Dwell Of the Sunwell.

[Stigg]

I am so confused about what is going on...

[rottentomato]

ok....im sick of saying this, so hopefully i can make it more clear by bolding it for you

QUIT WRITING 4362736781236712378 STORIES AT ONCE

its very hard to write lots of stories at the same time. your thoughts cant possibly be gathered well enough into one story if you spread everything out so much. its irritating to see all the stories you write, and think that there may be a good one admist all the crappy ones. no offence honestly, but please concentrate on one story, and stop posting 3 or 4 a day that are totally different. spend a day or two writing one story, have other people proof read it, and see what they think about it. go read some novels to get an idea on sci-fi/fantasy works, get a few fiction novels written by well known authors, and use them as inspriation. its frustrating to see that you have some potential, and that you have the desire and drive to write all the time, but you dont make the best use of your abilities. just take your time, and work things out until they mesh perfectly.

[Nitesky]

Dude, ur spamming my thread

[rottentomato]

Dude, ur spamming my thread

dude youre spamming the fan fic forum

[Nitesky]

Hey I just write for the fun of it I don't spam I just write stories to entertain

[Stigg]

Hey I just write for the fun of it I don't spam I just write stories to entertain

But the issue is they are not entertaining...as they aren't coherent.

They don't make sense, and they combine to make less sense.

rotten hit it on the head. Take some time to write one solid story. THEN post it after re-reading it. Tanitha just posted some more info on another one of your threads....

They....just....dont make sense.

[Nitesky]

Omg You Guys Are Retarded Screw This You Guys Like Novels Well I Cant Do That! You Guys Expect Perfect And Everything Else Go Ahead Moderaters Ban Me Nothing Worth It!

[Tanitha]

Omg You Guys Are Retarded Screw This You Guys Like Novels Well I Cant Do That! You Guys Expect Perfect And Everything Else Go Ahead Moderaters Ban Me Nothing Worth It!

No, not quite. People are offering constructive criticism. Once you've donned the mantle of writer you should expect a lot of criticism - some of it called for and some uncalled for. But it's through those experiences that you can improve your style and the flavour of your stories.

I'd suggest you keep on going, but taking some of the suggestions that have been made onboard.

[Inquisitor7]

Omg You Guys Are Retarded Screw This You Guys Like Novels Well I Cant Do That! You Guys Expect Perfect And Everything Else Go Ahead Moderaters Ban Me Nothing Worth It!

Nitesky, I'm giving you a warning. Chill out, and stop spamming the forum.

[Nitesky]

Who says I am spamming the forums! I am just writing SIMPLE stories and they go and judge it like a piece of crap when sometimes I don't ask them!

[Nitesky]

If i was a forums spammer I would have over 2000 posts.

[Stigg]

Perfect example. You just double posted. Why did you do that? THAT is spam.

You are posting incomprehensible stories over and over again...without taking anybodies criticism. Until you actually spend some time on a story I doubt many people will be reading any more of them.

[Tanitha]

Wait. I have over 2000 posts. Does that make me a forum spammer? I think the message a few of the earlier posters were trying to convey is that you post a plethora of new stories without completing them or developing the stories further.

I'm counting 8 new stories in the space of 10 days and as far as I can tell, the only one that is either complete or a continuing project was the one written by your brother.

Please don't take that as a flame or as an offensive remark. All I'm trying to do is explain why people are reacting the way they are. Look at what the other writers of Fan Fiction here have done - the way Fallonquinn is working on Loveless and developing the plot, characters and telling a fairly compelling story. It's simply a question of the mood of the forum and adhering to that.

[Nitesky]

Hey Stigg It's My Thread

[Stigg]

Hey Stigg It's My Thread

Nope. It's not. Neither are any of your "stories."

8. Thou Shalt Not Get Territorial. If you post or submit something to any of our sites, or to our forums -- be it an article, a news item, a strategy guide, or a suggestion -- it becomes the property of the site.

And.. assuming your referring to me calling out your double posts...
When replying to multiple posts within the same thread we ask that you use a single post to do so.

Generally it is a good idea to read things before you click away or sign papers.

[DumbCow]

Yea i just was looking at all the threads and nitskey man you have alota threads. if your gonna do alota stuff why not just make one called Nitesky's storys. that way you can post a bunch of different story not related at all and not have a thousand threads. ::)

Btw for a twelve year old its not that bad 5/10

Edit: replying to what someone said on page 2.